Whispering winds dance
delightfully this eve
Setting the mood for two
lovers to give
Carnal desires propelled
in unison
Hesitation defeated as
passions burn bright
Resistance futile as
bodies intertwine
Exploring new corners and
secret places
Soft touch, then rough,
just enough
Arched for pleasure,
leverage finds treasure
Slow, so firm, hard
pressed as one
Thick air, heavy breathe,
sweat
Sweet release, conquered,
subsiding seas
Gazing into one another
Two lovers, lay back and
watch the stars.
Randy sturridge
3 comments:
Sensual and strong!Beautiful!
Excellent illustration of that moment, very well done. A few sections really stand out to me-as I'm sure you realized by now I often find some of the intricacies in poetry so amazing- anyhow- Resistance line is great, as it's a form of resistance to be bound- intertwine puts a twist on that while adhering to the basic idea about resistance- very nice. Exploring line--Secret places- which to be a secret implies that someone it is not a secret to- so there's definitely something cool about how that all reads there- and I absolutely love the s repetitions with Sweet Release, ...Subsiding Seas Lovely flow to that- and at a perfect point in the poem too. Great job Randy
Debbie,
Thank you greatly for your comment, I will be sure to check out your end of the digital landscape here shortly.
Fred,
Haha, yes sir I do know how you love to discover gems in the most unlikely of words...and again you have. Thank you for allowing me to see what I myself do not realize initially. You have a talent my friend and would make a great editor on almost any literary avenue. I'm glad you liked the ending after the "climatic" apex. Thank you sir.
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